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4Y031/ Dental Assistant Apprentice

Example SrA Below the Zone (BTZ) Winning Nomination for 2Q 2008









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The following SrA Below the Zone (BTZ) example has been taken out of IMT.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

LEADERSHIP AND PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTIES
- Exceptional Airman who performed far above standards--Airman of Quarter MDOSx3, MDGx3, ABW, ESC
- Accomplishments culminated in MDOS Airman of the Year 2006--team player who sets the "gold" standard
- Key player in the 2006 HSI/AAAHC MDG "Excellent" rating and rare Dental "Outstanding" inspection results
- Passionate duty performance crucial in flight's selection as first ever AFMC Small Dental Clinic of the Year
- Actions as moulage team trusted agent directly contributed to MDG "Excellent" ORI rating--garnered IG coin
- Masterfully assisted in delivering dental care worth $510K--98.7% ?AFB personnel dentally ready to deploy
- Precisely handled dental biopsy program--100% accountability--timely notification relieved patients' anxiety
- First responder for patient syncope episode--commended on expert actions/skills/sense of urgency--life saved
- Revised dental scrub procedures--managed proper handling/storage/stock levels--infection control guaranteed

TRAINING, EDUCATION AND SELF-IMPROVEMENT EFFORTS
- Completed 30 hrs moulage training--exceptional EET member in training--assured realistic exercise scenarios
- Certified instructor--Basic Life Support--taught enlisted/officers basic life saving skill--first-rate performer
- Completed prophylaxis training certification--bolstered deployment readiness rates to command high 98.7%

OTHER ACCOMPLISHMENTS
- Active member of <BASE> Against Drunk Driving--dispatcher/driver--concerned for safety of base personnel
- Concerned citizen--Toys for Tots, Habitat for Humanity, Airman family readiness center--brilliant role model
- Precisely executed POW/MIA table ceremony at ABW Dining Out--galvanized integrity of time honored event



Note:
Very good BTZ package.  The opening lines speaks volumes and makes this a hard one not to appreciate.  Since I have no medical background, I am not very knowledgeable on all of the bullets, but I have enough of a background to know that in the Medical world getting into extra curricular activities is very difficult and you will seldom see honor guard participation in the MDG world. 


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