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Below-The-Zone
2S0X1/ War Readiness Apprentice

Example SrA Below the Zone (BTZ) Nomination for 2007









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LEADERSHIP AND JOB PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTIES:
- Controlled $230K Chemical Warfare Defense Equipment; accounted for 2K assets--ensured 94% fill rate/year
- Created CWDE inventory tracking worksheet; validation/research time reduced by 25%--saved 30+ man-hours
- Instituted MOBAG inprocessing into ## FW's Newcomers orientation; cut >40hrs/week--customer svs soared!
- Successfully transported wpns/muns to RAFM; 500+ "hot-cargo" safely moved--saved $9K+/outsourcing cost
- Prepped/inspected 880 trng/mobility bags for Wg personnel; 100% BIO fit compliance--Amn readied for war
- Spearheaded inventory of 15K CWDE units; id'd excess for cmd re-distribution--saved $1M/replacement cost
- Conducted C2 canisters inspections; validated 2K+ shelf life extensions--maximized asset usage/serviceability
- Oversaw Base Defense Weapon inventory team; acct'd for >3K M-9/M-16s--$1.3M wpns postured for GWot
- Swiftly executed warehousing proj; ID'd/moved 4K+ assets for disposal--recouped >35% whse storage space
- Handpicked to deploy--Ex Silver Flag; readied 58 Amn w/mobility gear--increased combat/warfighting skills
- Warrior Ethos; BMT Dorm Chief /Tech School Class leader/Flt PTL--consistently performed beyond his rank!
 

SIGNIFICANT SELF IMPROVEMENT:
- Finished 75 core tasks/job quals trng in 3 mo; achieved 5-lvl upgrade rqmts ahead of peers; awt'g 5-lvl award
- Completed 58 hours towards Logistics Management degree; 2 classes away from CCAF--outstanding 3.8 GPA
 

BASE AND COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT:
- Donated 10 hrs to local charity event; sold >5K tickets for NSPCC Newmarket Family Race Day--raised $29K
- Involved; RAFL post office/Amn's attic volunteer; MC'd sq commanders call; coached Sq b-ball/football team

Acronyms

acc't - accounted
BMT - Basic Military Training
cmd - command
CWDE - Chemical Warfare Defense Equipment
Ex - Exercise
ID'd - Identified
lvl - level
MC'd - emceed
muns - munitions
N/C - New Comer's
NSPCC - National Society of Protection to Cruelty to Children
proj - project
PTL -
quals - qualification
RAFM - Royal Air Force Mildenhall
 

Note:
Very good package.  Its impressive to see the span of work the airman did prior to being submitted for BTZ.  The most important items illustrated involved showing how the Airman achieved leadership potential while meeting the whole person concept.  This is a very good package.


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