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Below-The-Zone

4N051/Aerospace Medical Journeyman

Example SrA Below the Zone (BTZ) Nomination for 2005
 









Key Points to Writing
  • WRITE!!! The more you do it, the better you get.
  • Ask for HELP, the only person looking out for #1 is you.
  • The only person looking out for your subordinates is YOU!
  • Use a spell checker.  F7 works good in MS Word.
  • Use various writing resources like Merriam-Webster Online.

The following SrA Below the Zone (BTZ) example has been taken out of IMT.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from the Amazon.com ad on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

- Lead medic; responded to altercation/recognized unsafe scene--safeguarded crew/treated two trauma victims
- Sifted through/organized 800 run sheets; identified examples for training tools/feedback--improvement soared
- Admin whiz; processed 600 Peer review charts; 100% compliance with patient care documentation standards
- Managed provider review process; channeled feedback/improved patient coding--recaptured $50K for AF use
- Invaluable resource! Only Airman out of 12 MDG CPR instructors; primed to keep Wing 100% CPR qualified
- Tenaciously stocked new ambulances according to departmental protocol; guaranteed 100% mission readiness
- Far East Bazaar staffer; managed security/safeguarded $400K in merchandise--raised $59K for local charities
- Unwaiverable commitment; sorted 2K+ lbs of mail--eased burden of postal workers during manning shortages
- Recognized success! Nationally published poet; showcased ER/career with Girl Scouts--inspiration to youth
- Education zealot! Effortlessly maintained a 4.0 GPA; two classes from CCAF; pursuing Bachelor's degree
 

Note:

Just by the initial look you can tell the package is dated.  This was a winning package, and it shows.  The Airman's leadership potential was expressed throughout the package.  Writers and nominees, remember.  There are certain blocks that need to be filled to be competitive; On duty and off duty leadership, process improvement, community activities, and education to name a few.   This is a very good package illustrating the "whole person" concept.


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