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Award Examples
USAF Honor Guard of the Year
Award Cat: NCO
Winner: Wing
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Key Points to Writing
- WRITE!!! The more you do it, the better you get.
- Ask for HELP, the only person looking out for #1 is you.
- The only person looking out for your subordinates is YOU!
- Use a spell checker. F7 works well in MS Word.
- Use Merriam-Webster Online
to improve your vocabulary.
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LEADERSHIP AND JOB PERFORMANCE IN HONOR GUARD
DUTIES
- AU's #1 flight chief/HG member-led flight of 15 members on 71 details covering
17,700 square miles
- Mentored, trained and counseled 12 new guardsmen on 14 <BASE> AFB Honor Guard
measurable areas
- Led/directed 38 multi-service funerals; organized trips traveling over 13,800
miles to support three states
-- Dedicated over 240 hours; received 11 letters of appreciation for
professionalism--cared with grace and tact
- Rises above rank; assumed OIC duties without hesitation at five
funerals--seized all opportunities to lead
- Phenomenal manager during most demanding year--arranged 61 funerals and 10
flag duties--molded flight
-- Set the HG flight standard; his flight traveled 17,700 miles to 33 <STATE>
towns devoting 3,228 man hours
-- Inspired performance; flight participated in over 20% of honor guard funerals
in 2003--driven to excel
- Planned/organized/participated in 42 ABW annual awards banquet saber
cordon--staged a first class event
- Expert trainer--trained and molded 12 new honor guard members to proudly
represent fellow comrades
-- Zealously spent 112 hours coaching members in all facets of honor guard
roles--resulted in flawless details
- Led flight in accomplishing in-depth review of all records in preparation of
ORI--flawless inspection results
- Troops are #1 concern; spent off duty weekend helping HG member with OTS
application--gave total support
- Coordinated four flight team-building events during breaks--dramatically
improved flight cohesiveness/morale
- Managed and administered "C" flight training folders to reflect accurate and
definitive detail accountability
-- Refined method led to successful documentation of 71 details in 15
records--increased paperwork savings
- Designed/implemented new honor guard report card--provided vital feedback to
members; staged base-wide
- Unprecedented devotion; single handidly drove over 9,000 miles...ensured 100%
safety and on time arrival
- Premier flight chief; trained and mentored two new OICs on duties and
expectations--respected by superiors
- Rebuilt and revamped honor guard awards program--established flight member
recognition as primary focus
-- Led to four flight awards, two annual/two quarterly awards, over the last six
months--esprit de corp soared
- Excellent foresight--instructed new "C" flight chief, deputy, and
trainer--ensured seamless change of command
- Unparalleled guardsman/leader; honored as <BASE> AFB HG Flight Chief
Member of the Year
SIGNIFICANT SELF IMPROVEMENT
- Aggressively completing Community College of AF degree in Logistics;
maintained 4.0 GPA; 12 hrs left to go
-- Completed another 6 college hours in humanities; performed management
self-study--read two books
-- Finished two advanced computer-based courses in English studies--expanded his
communication skills
- Thirst for knowledge--attended a week long "Intro to Java" programming class
for web based applications
-- Positioned himself to lead training of all testers in the development of
automated scripts--stands above peers
- Certified flight instructor; completed 20-hr FAA Flight Instructor Safety
course--maintained 95% average
- Voracious student; mastered 16-hr Test Director system admin class--applied
knowledge as expert trainer
BASE OR COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT
- A dynamic NCO! Delivered over 100 meals to the community's elderly through the
meals on wheels program
- Community oriented on a global scale; charitably supports the Sung Ae Won
orphanage in Pusan South Korea -- Wrote visa and other authorization request
letters--decreased visa delays by 50%--benevolent humanitarian
-- Arranged/organized U.S. fundraising trip for 2004--first foreign fundraising
trip ever--masterful coordinator
- Volunteer extraordinaire--served over 200 plates of food at AWC
cookout--selfless devotion to honor guard
- Generous serviceman--1 of only 2 people that cooked for the annual honor guard
picnic--fed over 100 people
- Appreciates sacrifice of others--participated on the flag folding team for
retirements of three retiring members
- Puts others before himself--spent entire day for Habitat for
Humanity...completed a home for a local family
- Tireless giver--actively seeks opportunities both on/off duty to promote
fellowship and public relations
-- Selfless volunteer--assisted with holiday luncheons enjoyed by 85
members--enhanced esprit de corps
-- Communal interests--donated time to work with adopt a mile program--boosted
community spirit and kinship
- Solid gold performer who has a huge future in our Air Force--none more
deserving of the prestigious award! Notes: This is another really good award
package. I normally do not pickup on tense shifts but there was a minor
one up above, Rises. It ought to be Rose since it is part tense. Other
than this a small spelling error, this is a great example. Additionally,
this award utilizes the proper way of using numbers! Almost every possible
combination has been used. Finally, this award also shows why it is good
to write on your troops consistently. If you go back and look at the
2003 Airman Honor Guard example, you will see
similarities between the bullets. This is not a hit but a bonus since it
is often supervisors and their airmen are involved in the same activities.
Just make sure each receives the proper recognition for the event.
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