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Award Examples

Enlisted Recognition Program
Airman of the Quarter
4Y031/Dental Assistant Apprentice

Award Cat: AMN
Winner: BASE









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The following Airman of the Quarter example has been taken out of a IMT document.  I did not change mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)


LEADERSHIP AND JOB PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTIES:
- Masterfully assisted in delivering care worth $56K+--key to 98% of personnel being dentally ready to deploy
- Volunteered in records section--precisely transcribed treatment narratives into 150+ records--superb worker
- Demonstrated outstanding teaching skills--educated students on dental materials/tools/four-handed dentistry
- Provided meticulous management/documentation/handling of dental biopsy log--100% specimen accountability
- Revised dental scrub procedures--managed proper handling/storage/stock levels--infection control guaranteed
- Reviewed/collected 150 dental records--assured compliance with AFI--mitigated potential medicolegal issues
- Certified instructor--Basic Life Support; taught basic life saving skills--improved base emergency response
- Tobacco cessation class champion--briefed/promoted CSAF goal of 20% reduction in tobacco use AF wide
- Avid supporter of National Children's dental health month--improved oral hygiene awareness for 150 children
- Briefed oral health care/decay prevention for mother/child at Bundles for Babies course--increased knowledge
- Stellar individual--SQU Airman of the Year for 2006--chosen Dental Clinic Outstanding Performer by peers

SIGNIFICANT SELF IMPROVEMENT:
- Attended five training sessions with company rep--enhanced safety/productivity with staff continuing education
- Certified Basic Life Support instructor--challenged/passed demanding instructor course--top-notch performer
- Fired up war skills--completed 10 hours of demanding readiness training--reinforced MDG readiness posture

BASE AND COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT:
- Voted Vice President of Dormitory Advisory Counsel--liaison to the CCM--bolstered residents quality of life
- Selfless Service--assisted MDG First Sergeant with handing out welcoming baskets to ESC awards nominees
- Distributed 80+ medals to returning deployers at BASE's Heroes Homecoming--ensured proper recognition
- Outstanding supporter--read Airman's Creed during enlisted promotion ceremony--sustained enlisted tradition
- Lead by example--educated new PT leaders on AED Heartsaver training--optimized emergency preparedness
- Volunteered as MDG Steak Night server--cost savings passed to AF Club members--boosted esprit de corps

Note:

Good package, the supervisor/writer illustrated the airman's involvement and successes vividly.  Would expect to see an annual award for the same individual.  Lead ought to be Led.

Update:  As a writer sometimes a "cold eye" becomes important.  Looking at this award again, there are some serious issues within it.  First and foremost it is a good package with the possibility of being a GREAT package.  As a writer if you address a group vaguely, it losses its strength... 

e.g.   - Demonstrated outstanding teaching skills--educated students on dental materials/tools/four-handed dentistry
The question, How many students were educated? 

If you read a bullet and can ask how much or why during any part of it, then it needs to be worked on.  Especially for an annual award.

While following the same example line, be very careful of using the information twice.  In this case the line "- Avid supporter of National Children's dental health month--improved oral hygiene awareness for 150 children" seems to follow the same theory.  In order to prevent  faulty interpretation, watch the bullet targets and use sub-bullets if necessarily.


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