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Award Examples Enlisted Recognition Program (Airman of the Quarter, 2nd) Award Cat: AMN Winner: Flt
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The following Enlisted Recognition Program (Airman of the Quarter, 2nd) Example has been taken out of IMT viewer so the formatting might be off.  I did not changed mission information, only names to protect myself and the people I have received the information from.  If you have anything you would like to submit, please do so.  If you have found this information useful, please let me know. Everyone of these letters has taken considerable amount of time to put together.  Please treat yourself to something special from one of the ads on the page.  We will both get something out of it.  (All money gathered pays for hosting fees and domain fees.  HONESTLY, when I see money come in it also prompts me to work harder on the site.)

LEADERSHIP AND JOB PERFORMANCE IN PRIMARY DUTY
- #1 of 12 airmen in element; always looking for challenges; consistently displayed initiative and
  commitment; possesses NCO-level tenacity and leadership skills--epitome of excellence
- Attended specialized Asynchronous Trunking Module Switch training in <BASE> <STATE>.
  -- Utilized training to build a data connection between <BASE> and <BASE> AFB in support of BF 05-02 .
- Troubleshot Cisco processing unit and a Cisco 6500 chassis which were malfunctioning; Quickly isolated
  problem to faulty chassis and initiated immediate repair actions to bring critical TAOC network back on-line
- Configured multi-layer switching network equipment to support over 500 clients during exercise Blue Flag 05
  -- Greatly contributed to exercise success by providing a modern, high-speed coalition network to participants
- Deployed 45 days to Combined Air Operations Center <BASE> (CAOC-?), <BASE>(?AFB), as
  network technician in direct support of Blue Flag 05-02-- Key player in exercise setup and execution
  -- Meticulously administered four networks to support 517 US operators and 88 coalition partners to
     accomplish 1,620 combat air strike sorties; enabled US and coalition target integration of air tasking orders
- Troubleshot and repaired Video Teleconferencing System; isolated problem to improper connections leading to
  signal loss; system enabled Blue Flag 05-02 players to conference with six sites and Secretary of the Air Force.
- Repaired data link between <BASE> ANG base and <BASE> AFB; enabled data feed between both bases

SIGNIFICANT SELF-IMPROVEMENT:
- Dedicated to physical fitness--achieved an amazing 100 composite score on new Air Force fitness program,
  placed in the upper two percent of the squadron; formally recognized by the squadron commander in June 2005
- Completed 2 hours of computer-based training towards his Cisco Network Associate Certification; Used 
  knowledge gained to serve as a technical consultant in the set up and implementation of a local area training 
  network providing training to 25 military and 1 civilian personnel.

BASE OR COMMUNITY INVOLVEMENT:
- Donated notebooks and paper to local Sumter County school district's "Back on the Bus" program.
  -- materials collected provide much needed school supplies to underprivileged children in 31 local schools.
- Strong supporter of unit activities; played in the ###th Computer Operations Squadrons booster club's golf 
  tournament; Raised $1000 in funds to offset the cost of the annual holiday party.


Note:

IMHO, this package is very bad.  It appears the writer's chain of command failed him.  There is a lot of good information in this package but there are too many errors for a quarterly package.  After the first bullet, the problems started.  First, ATM = Asynchronous Transfer Mode not Asynchronous Trunking Module. When you write, make sure you know what you are talking about. After this, there are what I call, "Super Bullets". "Supper Bullets" are over three lines including sub-bullet, included in this are three line primary bullets. A three line primary bullet should and can be separated into a primary and sub-bullet.  After this seven of the bullets are actual sentences.  If any line contains a pronoun, it ought to be revisited at as should any line that contains punctuation. The spelling errors, were capitalization issues and there were only two minor numbering errors.

As a writer, new or otherwise, find someone to look over your work. If you are entrusted in looking over someone else's work, take it seriously.  A supervisor who doesn't know how to write, their airmen will suffer.  Finally, take time and review both the Tongue and Quill and  Preparing Official Communications they are the bases for AF writing.